A Critique of the poem written by Hakikur Rehman from Portugal Article - 7
‘Upstream Chara’ a poem published on Allpoetry.com
Your heart is remaining there
To see someone.
(The first line contains 7 syllables out of a total of 8 ones and the second line has 4 syllables out of a total of 5 ones)
How much hope in the mind
When you row the boat
(The first line contains 6 syllables out of a total of 8 ones and the second line has 5 syllables out of a total of 5 ones)
The above lines are a true examples of Ziket the modern and short poetic form. In the way, the poem Upstream Chara written by Hakikur Rahman has 25 % Ziket style and taste in it. I am looking for a bright future for the poet in literary circles. As the Ziket style is of the famous poets in the past like Dr. Maya Angelou, Robert Frost, Ashbery, John Donne, etc.
The structural study of this poem during the reading shows a Ziket’s color which is the core element of Zikorean poetry as:
1. A Ziket consists of two poetic lines.
2. The first line has 1 to 8 syllables
3. The second line has 1 to 5 syllables
4. The longest Ziket has a total of 13 syllables. e.g. Walt Whitman’s
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5. The shortest Ziket has a total of 2 syllables; https://bit.ly/3rLDVaU
one syllable in each poetic line.
The theme of this poem is hopeful voyage. Everyone is going to grabe his love and joyful life, without any pangs and worries. He creates depiction with the use of words like rainy, stormy, boat, upstream, river, and with the wish to go home. The poem talks about the love and shelter during the horrible voyage facing pangs, worries in the form of rainy and stormy struggle.
The poet Hakikur Rehman has made this poem deep within and thought provoking with the mixing of Zikorean structure unconsciously. The poet has a deep insight suitable for writing Zikorean poetry in the world.
Dr Zik
Jhelum Pakistan
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