A Critical Appreciation of the poem 'Connection' written by Rain
I like it as:
Making me feel
the connecting pull
It is wonderful poem I like all the lines.
By the structural point of view this poem 'Connection' is a continuous Ziket i.e, related to a shorter poetic form than Haiku ‘Ziket’, in English Literature in the poet-modern period of English Literary History. It shows Ziket’s color throughout the reading as:
1. A Ziket consists of two poetic lines.
2. The first line has 1 to 8 syllables and the second line has 1 to 5 syllables or vice versa
The longest Ziket has a total of 13 syllables. e.g. Walt Whitman’s
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5. The shortest Ziket has a total of 2 syllables; https://bit.ly/3rLDVaU
one syllable in each poetic line.
In the poem “Lines on the Antiquity of Microbes” Strickland Gillilan has written two poetic lines in this way, the first line contains 2 syllables and the second line has also 2 syllables.
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Strickland W Gillilan has written this short poem unconsciously in accordance with the formation of Ziket, a shorter poetic form than Haiku:
as Dr. Maya Angelou did in her poem “Tears” where 100 % Ziket's colors have been found. https://bit.ly/3i7YBa7
John Donne in his poem “For Whom The Bell Tolls”, https://bit.ly/3fjbQ5K
And if we look far behind in past, we see the Walt Whitman who did in his famous poem “O Captain! My Captain!”:
Ziket’s Shades in the poem of Walt Whitman the inventor of Free Verse Poetry:
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Structural Analysis:
The poet has written 12 Zikets in 24 lines to express the same theme. Actually the poet has used 100 % Ziket's water to irrigate the beautiful flowers' bed of the poem.
Structural Analysis of 'Connection'
"Gray, we need thee
come back free
(The first line has 4 syllables out of a total of 8 ones and the second line contains 3 syllables out of a total of 5 ones)
before they burry
me in the quarry."
(The first line has 5 syllables out of a total of 8 ones and the second line contains 5 syllables out of a total of 5 ones)
And he jolted and woke up
startled usual
(By skipping 'as' from the second line the theme remains same as 'startled as usual')
(The first line has 7 syllables out of a total of 8 ones and the second line contains 5 syllables out of a total of 5 ones)
swimming in sweat pond
leaving his spirit drowned.
(The first line has 5 syllables out of a total of 5 ones and the second line contains 6 syllables out of a total of 8 ones)
Why do I see this
over and over again
(The first line has 5 syllables out of a total of 5 ones and the second line contains 7 syllables out of a total of 8 ones)
with so much trust
that encaptivates me.
(The first line has 4 syllables out of a total of 5 ones and the second line contains 6 syllables out of a total of 8 ones)
Shaking my soul
with the help call
(The first line has 4 syllables out of a total of 5 ones and the second line contains 4 syllables out of a total of 8 ones)
holding my nerve
until I truly serve
(The first line has 4 syllables out of a total of 5 ones and the second line contains 6 syllables out of a total of 8 ones)
And this haunts me
for who is this guy
(The first line has 4 syllables out of a total of 8 ones and the second line contains 5 syllables out of a total of 5 ones)
knocking me everyday
with expectant eyes.
(The first line has 6 syllables out of a total of 8 ones and the second line contains 5 syllables out of a total of 5 ones)
Making me feel
the connecting pull
(The first line has 4 syllables out of a total of 8 ones and the second line contains 5 syllables out of a total of 5 ones)
needing my help
to be the self.
(The first line has 4 syllables out of a total of 8 ones and the second line contains 4 syllables out of a total of 5 ones)
It is noteworthy addition in the Zikorean Poetry by the Zikorean poet Rain.
Dr. Zik
Jhelum Pakistan